Caged Chickens Should be BANNED!!!

In room one we have been arguing about 

if Chickens should be Caged or not 

I found it easy to finish on time. 

I found It hard to use the right words. 

here's are success Criteria...   

write a title that tells the reader
 about the issue being argued✅ 
use a rhetorical question✅
write an introduction that
 includes my three main points❌ 
organise my ideas into paragraphs ✅
make sure each paragraph has a
 main point and two examples✅

write a conclusion that includes 
my three main points❌
edit for spelling and punctuation❌
present my work to a peer for assessment✅

 here's my work...

Would you want to be stuck in a cage with lots of other chickens?!I firmly believe that caged chickens should be banned!!!

One of the main reasons is that they can't move and get squished. Each chicken only has the space smaller than an A4 piece of paper.82% of hens that lay eggs in New Zealand are caged. Chicken Farmers can fit 45,000 chickens in one shed. 

Another important reason that chickens should not be caged is they cant act like a chicken should act. They like to Scratch for food.And Like to have dust baths but when they're locked up in a cage they can't!!! They can’t stretch their legs. or flap their wings. 

Also they get lots of diseases. One of those diseases are weak bones A.K.A  Osteoporosis. They get fatty liver disease. And they also get Ricketts which is a loss of vitamin D.

                    In conclusion I believe that Caged chicken should be banned. Because of the diseases they get how squished they are and they can't act like a chicken. 

By Joan!